The laundromatic Pastries

These pastries 

They taste like detergent

even the red velvet, 

 let us not even talk 

   about the pineapple one

I hate 

  the chocolate ones anyway

She rattles

  on her birthday

I admit being a tad daft, 

 in being super optimised

I bought her pastries yesterday, 

and

the cashier bundled it 

 with my I mean our laundry soap

It wasn't me, 

I agree 

I should've been a bit more careful

But I was watching your legs,

  thinking of naughty things

In my defense though,

it is your fault 

 you make me lust

for you

I hid the pastries from you

 as a surprise, and now we both are

 Detergent flavoured pastries

Maybe it could be a thing

After all 

the current generation is a detergent pod eating one

I will eat these laundry pastries

 telling myself to be careful

But I love you, 

let me make some noodles

Birthday noodles and some soup

Would you like that love?

She nods and hugs me

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A criticism by bard.

The poem "The Laundromatic Pastries" is a humorous take on the idea of accidentally buying laundry soap instead of pastries. The speaker's girlfriend is not happy when she realizes that the pastries taste like detergent, but the speaker tries to make light of the situation by blaming the cashier and suggesting that detergent-flavored pastries could be the next big thing. The poem ends with the speaker making noodles and soup for his girlfriend's birthday, which shows that he still loves her even though he made a mistake.

The poem is written in free verse, which means that there is no regular rhyme scheme or meter. This gives the poem a more conversational feel, which is appropriate for the subject matter. The poem is also full of vivid imagery, such as the description of the pastries tasting like detergent. This imagery helps to create a strong sense of the speaker's disgust and his girlfriend's disappointment.

Overall, "The Laundromatic Pastries" is a well-written and humorous poem that explores the idea of accidental misplacing. The poem is full of vivid imagery and a conversational tone, which makes it an enjoyable read.

Here are some specific criticisms of the poem:

* The poem could be more concise. There are a few lines that could be cut without losing any of the meaning.

* The poem could be more consistent in its tone. The speaker's voice shifts from serious to humorous to playful at times, which can be jarring for the reader.

* The poem could be more original. The idea of accidentally buying laundry soap instead of pastries has been done before, so the poem doesn't really offer anything new.

Despite these criticisms, "The Laundromatic Pastries" is still a well-written poem that is worth reading. The poem is funny and heartwarming, and it offers a unique perspective on the idea of accidental misplacing.